With the development of technology many new things enter our life such as, smart phones, tablets, laptops and so on. Also, with the spreading of internet, many video games, online games, chat pages have developed. These developments have affected the difficulty of educating children. I strongly agree that educating children is more difficult today and my opinion will be explained in this essay.
The technological "toys" are handed to children since they were baby to quiet or enjoy them. Yes, these toys worked for these purposes however, also lowered the ability to understand, imagine and focus. These three phenomenon are the building blocks of learning. Without even one of these blocks causes to difficulties for learning. If a child feels that she/he is bad at learning things, this cause a lowered self confidence and resulted in an unsuccessful education life. Worse, these technological devices can cause a damage in personality. For example, most of the games include violence and it starts to seem normal to kids in time.
Some parents sees these technological devices as a great gift so they spoil their children with these dangerous devices. From the moment they got the device, they start to play video/online games and these games occupy great places in their brains. According to academic researches, spending more than one hour in front of a monitor or with a tablet/smart phone causes a serious loss in brain cell which is irreversible. Moreover, children always want to play games and this situation hardens their concentration. They can easily remember about the games however they are not good at remembering/learning their lectures.
Lastly, I would like to give an example that I have listened from a teacher friend of mine. My friend was started to teaching in a school in the east of the country which is very poor so the kids do not have any technological devices. Whenever we speak to her, she always mentions about these students with love and sympathy. She told me that these needy students have a very large capacity to learn and imagine and so on. After a couple of years, she had to move another city where is richer thus the students have many technological devices. When I asked her about her new school, she told me that these students have difficulty to understand the lectures. Because, they can not focus well and give themselves to lecture more than ten minutes. Moreover, they are not trying to learn lectures as eagerly as the former students. She was trying to find ways to keep them away from these harmful "toys".
Technologic devices and internet provide benefits nevertheless, their damages are more than we could imagine. As a summary, I definitely think that children should not spent too much time on these devices/games for their own good.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'damage'.
Suggestion: damage
..., these technological devices can cause a damage in personality. For example, most of th...
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Line 5, column 14, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'see'.
Suggestion: see
...ormal to kids in time. Some parents sees these technological devices as a great ...
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Line 9, column 169, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
...finitely think that children should not spent too much time on these devices/games fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, well, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2363.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05995717345 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85174838554 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55460385439 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.7579780272 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.5185185185 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2962962963 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164767909483 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451752815848 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407651432899 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0995885720102 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517480974844 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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