El Nino is the name of warm ocean current that affects weather of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare the normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino Conditions
The diagrams compare the various weather position in Australia and Peru with normal and El Nino conditions.
There are two Pacific ocean directors,the East Pacific is stronger that the West Pacific and that is why warm water moves into the West Pacific ( weak winds' direction). While at the same time cool water and rich nutrients go up and also it influences warm water direction. The storm clouds make rainy weather in the west and consequently Australia owns rainy weather and the plants grow.Peru is hotter than Australia and because of this process makes them feel happy.
In contrast the storm clouds move into the east . The East Pacific is weaker than the west one and at the same time the warm water comes in the the opposite of the West Pacific with El Nino conditions. The rich nutrients and cool water go down and rich nutrients abandon and are replaced with poor nutrients. Therefore Peru is colder and rainier that Australia and the number of the fish decreases, and in Australia the sunrise causes decaying plants.
To sum up, there are some negative effects the countries are exposed to and El Nino conditions harm both of the them.
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the East Pacific is stronger that the West Pacific
the East Pacific is stronger than the West Pacific
Peru is hotter than Australia and because of this process makes them feel happy.
Peru is hotter than Australia and because of this, the process makes them feel happy.
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Therefore Peru is colder and rainier that Australia
Therefore Peru is colder and rainier than Australia
Sentence: While at the same time cool water and rich nutrients go up and also it influences warm water direction.
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Sentence: The East Pacific is weaker than the west one and at the same time the warm water comes in the the opposite of the West Pacific with El Nino conditions.
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