the pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household, and the table shows the amount of electricity used according to the number of occupants. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
Electricity is one of the vital component for human around the world. The pie chart shows the diversity of using the energy in Australian household. While the amount of electricity based on the occupants are showed on the table. Overall, Heating and cooling are the common energy that are used in Australia. While more users in a house are tend to use more power in Australia.
First, the households in Australia spend 38% for their heating and cooling activity. Heating water activity has 25% users around Australia. Surprisingly, lightning which is normally the most used electricity is used around 7 percent as same as freezing. The Australian are rare to use the kitchen set and stand by power with 4 percent and 3 percent. Moreover, the rest are used for another equipment that need electricity.
Secondly, the calculation of electricity that is used by the Australian is related with the number of users in one home. The home alone user will spend around 5000-6000 kilowatt each year. A couple are tend to use less than 8000 kilowatt. While the nuclear family will tend to emit around 7,5 – 10 thousand each year. A house that consist more than 6 person will use 12,000 – 16,000 kilowatt each year.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing the energy in Australian household. While the amount of electricity based on the ...
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Line 1, column 309, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mmon energy that are used in Australia. While more users in a house are tend to use m...
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Line 1, column 341, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...tralia. While more users in a house are tend to use more power in Australia. First,...
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Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...0-6000 kilowatt each year. A couple are tend to use less than 8000 kilowatt. While t...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilowatt' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilowatts'.
Suggestion: kilowatts
...A couple are tend to use less than 8000 kilowatt. While the nuclear family will tend to ...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
... year. A house that consist more than 6 person will use 12,000 – 16,000 kilowatt each ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, moreover, second, secondly, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83173076923 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58036061622 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528846153846 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.4926829268 58% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.4494504585 43.030603864 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.0 112.824112599 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.8666666667 22.9334400587 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93333333333 5.23603664747 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23468692686 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937867481059 0.103423049105 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104637816201 0.0843802449381 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174161300421 0.15604864568 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891829536507 0.0819641961636 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 61.2550243902 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.9970731707 65% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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