Well-known entertainer and athletes play a pivotal role in art’s community. Some people believe that they are deserve to much privacy. However, others disagree. In my opinion famous artist and athletes need to have much privet environment in their life. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, having any privacy is harmful for their children’s life. not only celebrities don’t have much privacy, but also their children are in harmful situation by reporting everyday life style. For example,
Mycle jacsone cover his children’s face to avoid face to the reporter. his children are not free because most of the reporter are always seek to the new news of celebrities new. while the celebrities are satisfied with lake of privacy, but their children are not deserved to show in every social media and every celebrities report. they have their own life and want to live free. these circumstance will lead that children’s well-known feel more conctinces and frustrate them.
this example clearly illustrates that having no privacy of superstars’ life will be harmful for their children.
Second, it is kinds of wasting money for government. IF government eliminate the amounts of budget that every social media cost for creating news of the celebrities’ life they will have more privacy. study shows that If government spend the budjet of making famous people news for educateing and university, Therefor, celebrities will gain their privacy and university will develop their education. This example clearly illustrates that spending money for superstars’ life news is kind of wasting money for government which could spend in many other issue.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. For two reasons. it is not only harmful for children’s celebrities but also kinds of wasting time for government to spend money for tracking the famous peoples’ life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, well, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38679245283 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00118148484 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490566037736 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.8366752607 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.65 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174212520622 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713573516072 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10635482349 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117910005712 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629098504555 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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