Music is something that has became everybody's favorite. Some people even view music as a good way to unite a lot of people from different backgrounds, such as cultures and ages. I personally agree to the opinion because of two reasons. First, music is often used to express something, therefore becomes people's second language. Second, there are many industry that is developed in the music field, thus makes it as a place where job seekers meet.
Music is often considered as a melodical form of a poem. In poem, people usually express their feelings through words and sentences, and in music, some of melodical tones are added into them. So, basically it is the same as people's daily languages, and thus made it often be used as people's second language to inform their feelings to others. For the example, a popular musician, Taylor Swift, who usually composes her own songs. She says that those songs are composed based on her true stories, so every song is a representation of her feelings that she wants to express to someone.
Furthermore, nowadays the music industry has developed faster than before. Many people work in that industry, including singers, dancers, band groups, and even their managers. This makes music industry as an opportunity for job seekers to work, and thus lead to the meeting of many people that come from different backgrounds, such as cultures and ages. Consider an example, Agnes Monica, an Indonesian hip hop singer. Because of her job, she often meets other singers that come from different cultural backgrounds, such as those that come from USA, or Canada.
In conclusion, I agree that music can unite many people with different backgrounds because it has been used widely as people's second language, and also its industry developed faster recently.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
Music is something that has became everybodys favorite. Some people even v...
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Line 1, column 347, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun industry seems to be countable; consider using: 'many industries'.
Suggestion: many industries
...ples second language. Second, there are many industry that is developed in the music field, t...
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Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be often
...oples daily languages, and thus made it often be used as peoples second language to info...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04026845638 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58930836605 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530201342282 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.877733149 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.875 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267673613996 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882418189805 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825390534543 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179956186508 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067393814046 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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