do you agree or disagree, the government should spend more money on arts than on sports?
Recently, the concept of how the government distributes its budget has been brought to public attention. Some people believe that the government should allocate more funds for sports improvement; however, others claim that arts enhancement is more magnificent than sports. From a personal perspective, the government should distribute money for both aspects evenly, given that sports and arts have the same importance for society. While sports are significant for people’s health, arts should be addressed for their contribution to develope civilization. Below I will strive my supporting points in more detail.
The first and foremost point, sports have a positive impact on society. Not only because it is essential for people’s personalities, but also, it is vital for their physical fitness. A vivid example that can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is in the developed countries such as the United States and Canada people accustomed to playing sport consistently which minimize the risk o some disease, such as diabetes and high blood pressure. Couple with better health, confidence is another benefit of the sport. Provided that people keep playing sports, they will always be refreshed and energized; furthermore, it has a significant effect on their personality. Therefore, funding sports is imperative.
Next, art is not less important than sports. Arts represent culture; to put in another way, when a society has vast arts that means it has a rich and fantastic culture. Moreover, arts serve as sorts of entertainment, such as movies and concerts, which are very important for people to socialize and communicate. Couple with entertainment, the emotional impact is another reason why arts are integral. Medicine and engineering students say, they study better when they have music play in the playground. A recent survey done by The University of Toronto found that students’ performance in a stander test significantly improved when Mozart was playing during the test, given that music improves general cognition in every field. Consequently, spending more money to support the arts is indispensable.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt. Sports and arts are fundamental to every society. It suggested that the government compromises to achieve arts/sports funds balance.
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Suggestion:
...s to achieve arts/sports funds balance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53055555556 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06409790765 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.3960915516 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8095238095 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267046237512 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867339459387 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859139377801 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168383104685 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0818450497174 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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