tpo 23 yellow cedar tree declining
The material discusses the concept of the causing of declining the yellow cedar trees populations. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective the listening challenges certain points outlined in the reading passage.
Firstly, the listening details the point in regard to this topic, namely the decline of the tree may be caused by parasites. Next, the aggressive feeding habits of the brown bears may be responsible of this decline. Finally, the freezing climate in the winter cause damage to the trees.
Conversely, the listening challenges the points, one specific contradiction is the beetle only attack the trees which was already damage, because the healthy yellow cedar trees could produce chemical which poison these parasites. Therefore, this beetle is not the fundamental reason of the decline. In addition to that, the yellow cedar trees grew in an island where there were no bears, but they still declined from this island. Bears were not responsible for killing the tress because trees were declined with and without the bears. One final point, these tress declined more from the lower elevated where is warm than declining from the higher elevated where is cold. If the cold weather was the reason, so we expected that trees could be damaged more in the higher. That is mean the freezing weather is not the reason of killing the trees.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing the yellow cedar trees populations. While the reading looks at the topic from one...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oints outlined in the reading passage. Firstly, the listening details the point...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the winter cause damage to the trees. Conversely, the listening challenges the...
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Line 3, column 555, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this tress' or 'these tresses'?
Suggestion: this tress; these tresses
...and without the bears. One final point, these tress declined more from the lower elevated w...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s not the reason of killing the trees.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, while, in addition, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1144.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 225.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08444444444 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42987171332 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537777777778 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0009093817 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355435728458 0.272083759551 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133720568755 0.0996497079465 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629754548214 0.0662205650399 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235199332514 0.162205337803 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734082172616 0.0443174109184 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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