Juvenile delinquency has been becoming an ever-increasing concern in modern society. Consequently, some people opine those teenagers who have offended seriously deserve punishment in the same way as adults. Personally, I firmly oppose this view because a completely identical penalty is normally unnecessary despite the need for a more lenient one.
On the one hand, a proper penalty for every offence, minor or serious, is critically important for criminals, victims and every citizen. First, it is appealing to victims because, to some extent, they need a kind of revenge after suffering a lot. Second, although it may sound contradictory that punishment is beneficial to offenders themselves, actually, a tiny penalty in time usually prevents them from committing heinous crimes, in other words, saving their life eventually. Third, everyone can benefit from a lower crime rate, and all appropriate sorts of retribution can work as a deterrent, warning those potential offenders about up-coming consequences of committing a crime.
On the other hand, separate situations between youngsters and adults determine distinct sentences, normally lighter, even though they had the same criminal behaviour as adults. Initially, many teenagers commit crimes because they may not realize what kinds of behaviour are offences in law for the lack of thorough education about preserving students from offending. Similarly, another exclusive reason for young criminals is the immature mind, and those reasons will be eradicated during maturation through suitable education and life experience. Finally, comparing to an adult criminal, it is relatively easier for the rehabilitation of a youth offender because however violent offences they committed, with an alternative form of punishment or a lighter sentence, there would be a much higher possibility for them to develop right moral values and compensate local communities for their guilt.
On balance, although it is inevitable that teenagers offenders should also be punished, different measures must be applied for the separate situations between juveniles and adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, second, similarly, so, third, kind of, in other words, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68338557994 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00729092454 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655172413793 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9273063474 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.083333333 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5833333333 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1666666667 7.06120827912 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0739233230957 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269261713288 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0281750751052 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0392090443159 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330513277223 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.52 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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