People today spend much time on their personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Do you agree or disagree?
These days joy has become the personal priority in spite of the incomplete work. Enjoyment has ruled over everything nevertheless of any achievements. I wonder sometimes why people are gravitating towards happiness with less labor done. Some people think that joy is the only way to achieve any sort of goals in life. However, few people reject those words and move towards implementing their actions diligently and meticulously enjoying occasionally for a reason. It is a fact that happiness brings many ways to lead our lives, but at the same time prioritizing only that one thing all the way is also a bad idea one would think. Framing my perspectives, I can definitely say that the statement that mentioned is absolutely correct as per my opinion. I will strengthen my views in the following paragraphs.
Happiness is inevitable. Emotions make any kind of difference in the individuals from bonding together to creating Freud between two. Preference to enjoyment should be given but not merely in all the circumstances. Anyhow, individuals happened to be more keen about enjoying themselves all the time compared to occasional celebrations. I can exemplify in detail considering my own friend. My friend is a software employee who hardly works but stands in front when it comes to partying. I can merely say that she is a Party animal. She is well concerned and active in her social participation rather than anything. She abandoned the physical and mental work to be delivered from her in the office. This devastated her professional career and got fired from her job.
In addition to this, excess enjoyment lets people to go nuts for anything even the worst things. In some instances, it may cost one’s life one would never expect. My college junior is the best example of this. When my junior was in primary school, he was a good and diligent in his own work took many appreciations for his works. But as soon as he entered in high school gradually his academic performance got to decline day by day. Everyone was shocked to know about him that he was addicted to drugs when he was in high school being influenced by a few of his bad peers. He had enjoyed in his own style deviating from all the academic works. Eventually, he was rusticated from his school for many years. Finding no other option, he ended his life at the age of 20. He would be secured a good position in the society by now if he had paid full attention in his academics rather than giving importance to freedom of unlimited joy.
All in all, one must remember that priorities should be given to those things which makes your life happy, but not to those which ruins that. Everything in life has its own period of time to enjoy. However, taking your responsibilities for granted is not the best way to achieve your target. Life is all about enjoying but not all the time!
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- People today spend much time on their personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Do you agree or disagree? 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'wonder'.
Suggestion: sometimes wonder
...ing nevertheless of any achievements. I wonder sometimes why people are gravitating towards happ...
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Line 4, column 174, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ns that. Everything in life has its own period of time to enjoy. However, taking your responsi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, well, in addition, kind of, sort of, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75050301811 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77054848963 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541247484909 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4400351827 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.78125 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.53125 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15625 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0699592950049 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0188399286705 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0220207639647 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0477743940179 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196636898647 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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