The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweighted is increasing.What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society?How can this problem be solved?

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The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweighted is increasing.

What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society?

How can this problem be solved?

The proportion of people who are in danger of disease because of obesity is dramatically increasing. In this essay, I discuss a number of reasons and solution for this phenomenon.

The first reason for the increase in overweighted people is our sedentary lifestyle. With the emerge of new job titles, most people have a behind the desk job that leads to a lack of activity. This can let us forget the utmost reason for working, being active. As a partial remedy for this problem, those who are in power can define a gym break for employees to compensate for their inactivity. Provided office-workers workout, not only can this be beneficial for them, but also employers can have a more efficient workforce.

Another reason to mention is the age we live in, with the rapid rise of technological solutions for our chores, people are less willing to do their daily tasks on their own. For example, people used to go out and eat dinner, but these days it is possible for them to order food online and receive it at their home. There is no doubt that technology is a mixed blessing, so it can have bad implications in our lives if we do not use it in the correct way. One of the best solutions for this problem is to break the chain of technology. We can do our daily tasks on our own and do not let it on the hand of technology. Only then it is possible to be less overweight. It might be hard at first but in the long run, it certainly would pay off.

Having mentioned the reasons and solutions, it can be seen that although our lifestyle has changed, we can adapt ourselves to it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...people is our sedentary lifestyle. With the emerge of new job titles, most people have a b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, for example, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1294.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44673539519 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62860767322 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54295532646 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8594480496 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2666666667 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53333333333 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339759652515 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120375557593 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583860403423 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210169837163 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700037335535 0.056905535591 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.0946893788 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 12.4159519038 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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