You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months. •

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope, you are doing well.

I am writing this letter to inform you about a training course which I’d like to attend outside of the organization.
This training course includes a detailed explanation of the USA HealthCare program as well as its usage. This is an 18 hours course that can be attended online or by going to a classroom. One of the crucial objects of this course is; not just to provide theoretical knowledge but to show the real-life examples of lives being impacted by these benefits schemes.

As our organization occasionally helps employees financially, who are aspirant to pursue such interests, my expectations are also the same. I understand the importance of my work, I’ have decided to attend this course in my personal time. However, I would request our organization for funding for this course.

Being a Benefits Operations Administrator, this course will enhance my knowledge about the benefits sector which will eventually be beneficial for my job. If I’m allowed to complete this course, I am sure it will also help me to work more efficiently.

I am looking forward to your response.

Yours sincerely,
Sumit Singh

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 92, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'benefits'' or 'benefit's'?
Suggestion: benefits'; benefit's
...rse will enhance my knowledge about the benefits sector which will eventually be benefic...
^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 176, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'completing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: completing
...eficial for my job. If I'm allowed to complete this course, I am sure it will also hel...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 1615.20841683 62% => OK
No of words: 196.0 315.596192385 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12755102041 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94409860168 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647959183673 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 506.74238477 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6166220863 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.75 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128434972277 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531118814291 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382391005111 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0711718899594 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030240032681 0.056905535591 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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