The author of this argument claims that the Hilview town which was previously abandoned by the computech software company left the city residents unemployed,hence it would be a prudent measurement to encourage the Autotech company to build their manufacturing plant which could alleviate the city ravaged by scourge of unemployment.It might seem logical,at first glance, to concur with this argument but thorough appraisal reveals that the claim is rife with loopholes.
First of all,we need to dig a bit deeper to know the exact reason of abandonment of the computech company.There may be plethora of reasons for such decisions for instance, may be the local people resist them from doing so.As a new factory or company always attract people from neighboring city,hence they could create some cultural hindrance.Sometimes political uprising and other social problems impede such foundation.Therefore, Its important to have the knowledge about the political and social situation of that particular town.
Secondly, The author did not mention about the communication and transportation system in that town. If takes several hours fo daily commute, in that case the assertion will inevitably fall apart.Furthermore its also important to know the distance from the distributor to the Hillview landfill area.If the Autocompany has to bear a huge amount of expense on transportation that would make their business unprofitable. In addition, if the company needs to pay hefty tax on imported parts that would make the situation even worse.In such circumstances they would be less likely to set up the factory.
However,the author mentions about the employment issue but he does not mention whether the residents in that town are really suitable for that job.If the residents are not technically qualified to carry out the job,then how would it serve the purpose of employment.
To sum up,the argument is based on some faulty speculations which makes it unwarranted and flawed.We need more pieces of information to substantiate the feasibility of such recommendation.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1707 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.065 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.845 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.31 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.477 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , hence
...mpany left the city residents unemployed,hence it would be a prudent measurement to en...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...city ravaged by scourge of unemployment.It might seem logical,at first glance, to ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , at
...ge of unemployment.It might seem logical,at first glance, to concur with this argum...
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Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , we
... is rife with loopholes. First of all,we need to dig a bit deeper to know the ex...
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Suggestion: There
...of abandonment of the computech company.There may be plethora of reasons for such dec...
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Suggestion: As
... local people resist them from doing so.As a new factory or company always attract...
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Suggestion: , hence
...ays attract people from neighboring city,hence they could create some cultural hindran...
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Suggestion: Sometimes
...ey could create some cultural hindrance.Sometimes political uprising and other social pro...
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Suggestion: Therefore
... social problems impede such foundation.Therefore, Its important to have the knowledge ab...
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Suggestion: Furthermore
...he assertion will inevitably fall apart.Furthermore its also important to know the distance...
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Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...he assertion will inevitably fall apart.Furthermore its also important to know the distance...
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Suggestion: If
...stributor to the Hillview landfill area.If the Autocompany has to bear a huge amou...
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Line 4, column 299, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...stributor to the Hillview landfill area.If the Autocompany has to bear a huge amou...
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...hat would make the situation even worse.In such circumstances they would be less l...
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Line 5, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...s likely to set up the factory. However,the author mentions about the employment is...
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Suggestion: If
...t town are really suitable for that job.If the residents are not technically quali...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , then
...chnically qualified to carry out the job,then how would it serve the purpose of emplo...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
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...ve the purpose of employment. To sum up,the argument is based on some faulty specul...
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Suggestion: We
...s which makes it unwarranted and flawed.We need more pieces of information to subs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, as to, for instance, in addition, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 320.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.471875 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28650026386 2.78398813304 118% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.468620217663 128% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 22.8473053892 197% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 146.605816072 57.8364921388 253% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 250.142857143 119.503703932 209% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.7142857143 23.324526521 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 22.8571428571 5.70786347227 400% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111180512531 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426054755702 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418631230087 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0501522473121 0.128457276422 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424281391024 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.2 14.3799401198 189% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 17.34 48.3550499002 36% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 12.197005988 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.33 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.36 8.32208582834 124% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.0 11.1389221557 180% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.