The lecturer asserts that communal online encyclopedias offers a lot of benefits, while the reading passages argues that it is problematic compared to traditional encyclopedias.
First, the lecturer contends that errors can exist both traditional and online encyclopedias. However, mistakes are easier to be corrected in online than in papers. Mistakes on the paper remains in decades and takes time to revise them. This counters the reading passage's claim that online encyclopedias have inaccurate information because it can be made up by anyone who does not have academic credits.
Next, the lecturer points out that online encyclopedias have strategies to protect their contents from hackers or users who had malicious purposes. One of the strategies is to create read-only format, so that people cannot make useless changes. The other is to hire special editors to monitor all the changes have made and eliminate detrimental changes. This contradicts the reading passage's cliam that whoever can distort the content in encyclopedias.
Finally, the lecutrer maintains that online encyclopedias have no space restrictions. Thus, they accurately reflect users' current interests and represent diverse views. This reputes the reading passge's claim that communal encyclopedias focus too much on immaterial and minor matters.
- Tpo 9. Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.I completely disagree with this claim that nowadays children are less creative than they were in the past. Here you can see my reasons. 90
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 70
- TOEFL T P O 5 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- It is more important to keep your old friends than to make new friends. 70
- Cars have made a greater impact on society than airplanes 90
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, so, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 52.1666666667 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1133.0 1977.66487455 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 198.0 407.700716846 49% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72222222222 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 4.48103885553 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97491896403 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 212.727598566 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626262626263 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3498140056 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4166666667 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164393709587 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589700032509 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416253456966 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110454183996 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036935659563 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 58.1214874552 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.6 10.9000537634 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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