The topic is regarding the role of individuals in managing their society. The query is about, whether people should oblige only to just laws and disobey others, or accept what they are getting. I support people should raise objections to what they consider as wrong, but that objection has to be in certain limits.
First reason, why am I inclined towards promoting citizens to object is, because of the necessary change in rules with time. Every law, made by our administrators, needs to be monitiored for any change required, to maintain the viability of that particular one. For example, in my country, India, there is a law on reservation for socially backward castes in various fields like representation in parliament, seats in educational institutions, work areas, etc., This law was passed when India after independence from the British people, in mid 20th century, was in a horrible state, especially in terms of racism. To improve this state, we needed this change. However, now that state has changed. People from the backward castes as well, have gained higher status in society by getting good education and opportunities. This is where, people really need to start objecting this law, based on caste, as it’s no longer working towards upliftment of the weaker section, the reason it was implemented. Although, politicans or elected leaders have this duty, but they are afraid of losing their vote bank.
Secondly, the resistance towards unfavorable rules will provide robustness in our system of law. For instance, in a country like India, where we have wide variety of people living, there are lots of continuous amendments that can take place to build a constitution, that would treat each community alike. Take the case of marriage. In our country, its illegal to have two wives. But, since people from the Muslim community has some religious thing, which allows a man to have multiple wives. So, for this, our constitution does exempt people of this religion from that specific law. This happened because of the followers of that religion, who protested against the law of single marriage. These exceptions and amendments will help in maintaining faith among all the communities in our national administration.
In addition to the benefits mentioned above, some issues needs consideration which can challenge our position, to support rebel against improper rules. Firstly, by saying every individual should start protesting against any rule, he didn’t like, doesn’t make sense. It’s hard to determine the justifiability of any rule. Some rules made for adverse situation of any section, could be having a limiting effect on the other sections. Law making requires rigorous analysis and should be finalized based on the most benefitting situation for the society as a whole.
Also, frequent resistance and disobedience, in a unruly manner will never lead to a stable management. An administration cannot rule over a community where each individual is ready to threaten the authority if any order goes beyong his/her liking. In conclusion, I would state objecting to unseemly rules is justified only if this objection is well analyzed and also performed through civilized channels. Every individual’s problem or objection shouldn’t be allowed to hamper the peacefully working system unless all decent ways have been tried out, and the change being requested is really crucial for the society.
- TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism 3
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- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 50
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 45, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a unruly manner" with adverb for "unruly"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
..., frequent resistance and disobedience, in a unruly manner will never lead to a stable management....
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Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...requent resistance and disobedience, in a unruly manner will never lead to a stab...
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Line 5, column 628, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sted is really crucial for the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2897.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 548.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28649635036 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89145718771 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 317.0 215.323595506 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578467153285 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 913.5 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 63.6121358432 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.464285714 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123691991245 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0317360718131 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373356710367 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715993702857 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167674643082 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 171.0 100.480337079 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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