some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. others believe that children's peer groups and parent as their role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
now a days, with the increase in the technology, led to the increase in the proliferation of media. With the increase of the entertainment industry, such as movies, TV shows and other media related acts, the influence of it ies very much ther is much more influence on the people watching it for the sake of entertainment. I agree with the author that the media is the cause of increaseing violence in the society among the children.
First, with the increase of technology, smart phones have become an essential commodity for every user. now a days, even children is getting access to the smart phones and other media related gadgets such as tablets and personal computers. Moreover, every gadget is equipped with the internet access, where it is not very easy to control the content, the user wants to stream. there is a saying which goes, "The bad spreads faster than the good." In this case as well, the violence in the form of entertainment is influencing the society, especially children in an insidious way. Adults have some control in life, unlike children, who are yet to be genteel and refined. Also, children tend to get influenced by the movies and movie stars act as a role models. they tend to enact the acts potrayed by their role models in the real life. Since, they lack the necessary decorum, they cannot weed out the good from the bad.
Second, the author mentioned that some people beleive that children might take their parents as their role models. this is true in the case where there is limited access to the pernicious media. this is not extant and is only applicable in the olden days. In the olden days, children has very limited/no access to these sorts of media, the only way that the children connect to the external world, is through books and other reading aids. only these mediums influence the children's behavior and developed morals in them, where the children are raised in a staid environment. Hence, the later argument is only applicable to the olden days, to be precise, until the start of twentith century. later in the twentith century, the influence of media, is much more than the other mediums, on the society, especially on children.
Finally, from the above discussion, one can say that mass media and the stars involved in it, is the major influence on the children, in the present day scenario. In conclusion, I agree with the author's statement that, some people beleive that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in out society, especially among children
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 437.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87871853547 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55974589837 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464530892449 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3253792042 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.6 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410471564305 0.243740707755 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123076522454 0.0831039109588 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109913306795 0.0758088955206 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274964192408 0.150359130593 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689303829356 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.