Some people believe that to be successful at sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion ?

Nowadays, sport is the most entertainment providing activity because inhabitants indulge in it as well as everyone can gain strong health. few think that natural strength is required to win in sport while others say that working hard as well as practicing in the nets can bring success. In my opinion, to become victorious person at a sport requires a lot of work in his professional game.

On one hand, some people, the ability which came naturally is the key to be succesful in a sportfield because it makes a person confident. Self confidence is a main motive of a sports person. Although athlets know about rules and regulations of a game, they need to be confident to become a victorious sportsman. For instance, In olympics, Which is the most eminent copitition platform for international athelets, players play with a confidence which builded by themself because of their original strength. Obrain, who is the champion for a decade, has a strength. In addition, Tough competition is given by a player when he has a natural capability. Tough competition is a way to win the moat of matches in a sports, but it is not possible to all.To illustrate, athelet, who gives a neck to neck competition, he rules the sports field. Hence many bilieves these skills come from nature

On the other hand, others say, devoloping the techniques of the sport by working on hus game as well as repeating the task to overcome the mistakes is crucial to become a king in sports. Even though learning from mistakes is cricial, person have to work on the mistakes in order to make his game sharper than others. For example, Virat kohli who is the world number one player in the cricket, he used to practice often with commitment to remove his mistakes. Hence he became a great criketer. Similarly, most of them say learn over mistakes and work hard to develope the game will lead the to become a great sportsman

To conclude, I believe that devoloping their game with practice and work hard make them a victorious sportsperson. However, some say that to be a succesful sportsman, he have to maintain natural ability which leads to devolope their confidence and tough competition skills while others say that practicing is a way to overcome mistakes

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Few
...ell as everyone can gain strong health. few think that natural strength is require...
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...eryone can gain strong health. few think that natural strength is required to win...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a sport' or simply 'sports'?
Suggestion: a sport; sports
... is a way to win the moat of matches in a sports, but it is not possible to all.To illus...
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Suggestion: To
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Suggestion: Hence,
...competition, he rules the sports field. Hence many bilieves these skills come from na...
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Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put before the verb 'practice'.
Suggestion: often practice
...r one player in the cricket, he used to practice often with commitment to remove his mistakes....
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Suggestion: Hence,
...with commitment to remove his mistakes. Hence he became a great criketer. Similarly, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, similarly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74924471299 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75592296684 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549848942598 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4949218774 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.8 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201385340159 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632856222125 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06464314846 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141723429077 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638671173235 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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