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Nowadays, advertisement is been a vigorous method for manufacters to sell their products easily. But there is a controversial argument. what is the influence of tv advertising that is leaded towards young children. Most of the people point out that it is not a good idea that young children are aimed in television(TV) advertisements, and others oppose with this statement. Personally, I think that this kind of advertising should be prohibited. I feel this way for two reasons which I substituate in the following essay.
At the first place, children in these ages are so emitating. They do anything what they see on TV, and they want anything new what they watch in TV advertisements. This is not acceptable for children that they have not a goods while one of them has it in the advertisement they watch. My son's case is the compelling example of this. He is four years old. He is used to watch TV with us every evining. Can be said, everyday we have a struggle due to advertisements are showed among the TV programs. He wants every thing that showed in the advertisements in which children are present and have a role in them.
Secondly. most of the TV advertising are depective for children in these ages. The producures of advertisements are able to give such charm and attractivity to an unvaluable product in advertising that can persuade children to have one of that product. Since children in these ages have not the ability of recognizing good from bad, they are attracted by them. For instance, a tv advertising that I recently watched was an Ad in which two children had role in it, and pruduct they advertise was just a pen had little different shape from normal pens. It was showed in some way that it has particular features.
In conclusion. I strongly believe that any tv advertising in which young children is their porpuse should be baned. This is because children tend to experience anything they see on TV advertising, and the way one product in these advertisemet showed is just exaggeration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81088825215 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01561468118 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487106017192 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4772449433 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9523809524 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.619047619 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305928944172 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107966669245 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121278744004 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217932294863 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800049610202 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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