The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people’s efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
The premise of Technological advancement as a means to give humans more leisure time is a rather interesting idea. Technological advancement has been there ever since the discovery of fire and then the invention of wheel. So, let us review what the said technological advancement has brought to us till date, and then discuss what it might have in store for us in the future
The goal of of technological advancement ever since the aforementioned invention of the heel, has been to improve the efficiency of humans. Mankind has improved leaps and bounds in terms of connectivity and movement of materials. We are able to transmit and receive data from any part of the world within nanoseconds, and are capable of transporting people across the globe within hours. Our healthcare is in a much better shape, and as a clear evidence, our mortality rates are decreasing. Overall, it is more than fair to say that Technological advancement has in fact improved people’s efficiency.
But the next question that arises is, has that necessarily lead us to have more leisure time? The answer, whether you ask a millennial student or a working professional or a retired person, would be a resounding NO. It has DECREASED moreover, I would say. This paradoxical decrease in leisure time with improvement in technology does have some attributable causes. First is that the improved connectivity and mobility afforded by technological advancement has given us more to do. It has widened the perspectives of each individual, and given us more things to tick of our bucketlists, more places to visit, more knoledge to gain, more people to meet so on and so forth.
This phenomenon is not necessarily a bad consequence of technological advancement. I would argue that it is a good unintended development, which we also should know how to control and slow down occasionally. My outlook for the future of technological advancement is also the same. It will sure improve humans efficiency in all ways possible, but we humans, as curious as the explorers we are, will constantly find more to do in lieu of our widening horizons. Its Catch-22 situation that we can be glad we fund ourselves in
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- The following appeared in the memo from the director of a large group of hospitals.“In a controlled loboratory study of liquid hand soaps, a concentrated solution of extra strength UltraClean hand soap produced a 40 percent greater reduction in harmful 50
Comments
A lot to be improved
A lot to be improved
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, look, moreover, second, so, then, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01643835616 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17541219917 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539726027397 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1415758882 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.722222222 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2777777778 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27777777778 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350065737864 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943895917387 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768407988642 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193614718446 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639032640974 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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