Throughout history, celebrities played a prevailing role in every individual's life all over the world specially the young ones. The inevitable uestion which has always caused debate among academicians is whether opininos of famaous people are more significant to teenegers than old people or not. Some people believe that famous people' opinion is more important for young adult and some disagree. Iam on the belief that famous people play a key role in young adult. I the following essay, I will elaborate on my view point through two noticeable reasons.
First of all, teenagers consider celebrities as their role model. In fact, new generation imitiate whatever famaous people do, there is no difference for them their acting or believing is acceptable or not. Take myself as a compelling example, when I was at highschool several years ago, I loved one of actress and wanted to be an actress in the future. I didn't know anything about art but because of her reputation I wanted follow her.That impations took mt time a lot after a while I understand that I did not intrested to art at all.Had I not engaged in that acrtess and not wasted my time , I would be much more successful now This example illustrate that opt famous people can have a negetive effect on teenagers' future.
Second, young people think famous minds and thoughts are correct. In other word, they follow them with a blid eyes.For example, in one of reputation movie one of the actor used sigarate in all section abd after that most number of young people in highschool imitate his act. HAaving seen that movie in the country, youth considered his act as a high-class figure.Moreover, that movie created a wrong cultrul among youth. Not only, can famous ones have wrong ideas but also they have negetive effect on teenager'future.This example demostrate that how a bad character have influence on young people.
In conclusion, I strongly beleive that opinion of celebrities are more significant for youth in comparison with the old one because of they act as a role model for young one and their thoughts acceptable among youth.Should youth notice to famouse people less, they will find their way and make less mistake.
- TOEFL T P O 49 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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- TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso 40
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94594594595 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75939965225 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556756756757 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.6416928552 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.714285714 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162660194946 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569734498913 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462829383617 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10157783348 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270113201492 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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