Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go.Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:•Say why you would like to go•Suggest what yo

Dear Ms. Winner,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I am available between 20st and 23rd June and would like to attend Cuba trip as I will assist you in many ways.

First of all, I have been there before consequently I visited innumerable tourist traps there which were mesmerasing. I will be over the moon when I am visiting Nation Cuba forest with youth. It is also a good opportunity for me to get away from exams and meetings.

Secondly, I can speak Spanish fluently thus I will assist you in communicating with indigenous people. I also could guide them during Cuba Palace, Sun Bazaar and Star Basilica tours since I am an expert on them.

Finally, please let me know how much I will be charged for this journey. I also would be grateful if you could give me information about subsidies provided by local authorities for parents. I hope my application will be accepted and it will be an amazing experience.

I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Mary Brown

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Cuba) must be used with a third-person verb: 'trips'.
Suggestion: trips
...23rd June and would like to attend Cuba trip as I will assist you in many ways. F...
^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nd it will be an amazing experience. I look forward to hearing from you. Your...
^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m you. Yours sincerely, Mary Brown
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 835.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 178.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69101123596 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62918947459 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.696629213483 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 257.4 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3637413394 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9090909091 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.81818181818 4.34317383033 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124079634136 0.216113520407 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045344304797 0.0766984524023 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050745664687 0.0603063233224 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0694602790914 0.12726935374 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597687743775 0.0580467560999 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 8.37731958763 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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