Without the shadow of doubt participatin in communities has palyed a signifact role in socialization of Humans throught the history. As some people may hold the view that nowadays younger do not participate in communities; However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint. I personally agree that younger people do not take part in community gathering. Among myriad resons wich can support my idea, I will delve into the most cospicouos one, which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
First and foremost, I believe one of the reasons that younger do not participate in communities is not having enough time sinec today's life is a lot more complicated than it was before. For example, in older days people used to work only everal hours a day but in owr own life we have to work two place at the same time to be able to provide for our family. I myself a student in one of the biggest universities of iran and at the same time work in a company to make income and as aconsequence I work around 16 hours per day. This amount of work leaves me no time to commit it to helping my community and as result people might say ypunger people do not take part but on the other hand older people who are usually retierd from work sped their free time in the community which is a lot.
The second reason one should take into account is nowadays younger people have more places to entertain themselves than going to a community work which is disadvantage since by having such entertainment only ourselves can benefite from but participating in a community, The whole community canexploit the result. An istance of such behavior is a friend mine whose name is Billy. He has The time to participate in communities but He perefers to paly with his friends a video game at home since he thinks it is more fun. The more he plays the less he is enthusiastic about joining the community.
Thye third reason that I can mention is, Because of the changes in recent year and concntraition of a huge population in a small vicinity, not so many people knows those who are living within a community. Not being familiar with participants in one community results in not being able to make contant with them. For example in our community a round 100 years ago as my grandma told me once, roughly 50 persons used to live but now more than 1000 people are living there and iI dont know most of them so we have no incentive to gather around.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples leads us to the conclusion that based on the fact that communities are now accomodating more people and people are more busy and there are other entertainment that one could enjoy in his free time, ypunger are less active in communities. Actually there are some othere reasons and examples advocated the claim which is not mentioned.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...han 1000 people are living there and iI dont know most of them so we have no incenti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, third, thus, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61431411531 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67761727694 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506958250497 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.6945546097 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.529411765 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5882352941 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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