Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Development of technology has led to an increase in the number of areas in which the government should invest and support. While a proportion of people maintain that the governors ought to spend money on arts, I hold a different view, believing that the athletics including state-sponsored Olympic teams deserve more support from the government. This essay will explore a couple of reasons supporting my perspective in the following paragraphs.
First of all, owing to the higher popularity of athletics among young people, government supports of them can lead the youngsters to take the sportsmen as their role models. This approach has several noteworthy impacts on people including their improved will to exercise to a larger extent in an attempt to change into stronger, healthier individuals such as their mentors. For instance, my brother is extremely into soccer and somehow worships his favorite soccer player. Consequently, he always follows that person's pieces of advice about the outstanding effects of a healthy lifestyle entailing regular exercise and a healthy diet. Therefore, my brother goes to the gym every day to build a body suitable for becoming a successful soccer player. This new attitude helped him in contrasting aspects of his life from his physical health to mental and even intellectual development. Since he began to do sports at an early age, he could lead a high-level personality and a more mature outlook towards life.
Secondly, virtually all the people around the world appreciate Olympic teams and watch their competitions resulting in a higher rate of acquaintance with the countries of the teams. Hence, there is a vast and beneficial opportunity for governments to exploit the media of other countries to advertise for their own culture and attract a large number of tourists. I assume an example can shed light on this notion. A couple of years ago, an exceptionally significant Persian animal was in danger of extinction. Thus, the national volleyball team members decided to put a picture of that animal on their T-shirts in the world championship to send this substantial message to the rest of the world. As the volleyball matches are immensely popular among people in every corner of the globe, a plethora of people who were interested in the environmental issues made a massive influx to the country and created a considerable income source from tourist attraction for Iran. This happened owing to the world sought-after entity of the sports.
On the whole, taking all the aforementioned reasons and example into account, I believe that athletics merits a larger quantity of supports and investments from the governments compared to the arts. Not only will sports inspire and encourage young people to choose a healthier lifestyle, but it also will help the country with a higher tourist attraction due to the high popularity of the athletics all around the world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...rtise for their own culture and attract a large number of tourists. I assume an example can shed ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2449.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18855932203 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9330230252 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552966101695 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9929771637 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.894736842 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8421052632 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26315789474 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179512527208 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529104597062 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665687422462 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134096528361 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105543116236 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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