Today the internet and TV have created chance for ordinary people to become famous. Is it a positive or negative development?
It is true that some opportunities have been given by the development of internet and television having turned some ordinary people to popular. It seems to me that this is a positive trend, and I will explain my arguments more below.
It is widely known that the internet is a media in which people could express their feelings freely which would be beneficial for some introvert people often avoiding having face-to-face communication with others. The example could be seen at Pew Die Pie who has the highest number of YouTube subscribers throughout the world. Before being a content creator on the digital entertainment website, he was an introvert person who always got bullied by his classmates at school. Only after he uploaded several gaming contents on YouTube, now he could earn $1 billion monthly revenue. Moreover, this trend also could cut down the unemployment rate in a state, inasmuch as it has enlarged numerous opportunities of job vacancy. Numerous unemployed people now are seeking chances to become an influencer and celebrity by making some YouTube videos and attending several film castings held by TV programme industries. Not only does it provide an enormous amount of salary but also it is easy for less-skilled people to make some unique videos on YouTube as long as they understand how to access the internet.
In conclusion, I would argue that the development of the internet and television has given significant positive effects on both people and a country. It could help some people who tend to avoid express their feeling directly to others to become highly expressive people on YouTube as well as television and reduce the rate of employment in a country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0752688172 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81235731772 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587813620072 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.4526601979 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.727272727 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3636363636 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226185105683 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808350124073 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765703474703 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167191390582 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033792807493 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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