At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Young adults are asset to any country’s development and success. For countries with larger number of young adults, it requires detailed study to assess the advantages over disadvantages, which depends on the condition of the countries in concern.
It is undeniable that young adults are essential for progress and invention. For countries with good socio-economic conditions, the larger number of young adults is a blessing. They are energetic and enthusiastic. They are full of new ideas. They are capable of using the resources of their countries for a better future. Although older people are important, they often lack enthusiasm and a thirst for improvement. Countries with strong economy can provide young adults with the opportunities they require in order to be successful and also contribute to their countries. So for developed countries who are financially able to create employment for its’ young people , their greater number contributes to the advantages of the country. There might be some problems like saturation and conflict, but the larger picture clearly shows us a positive result.
On the other hand, countries that lack in economic strength, it often brings difficulty. This is because they usually don’t have enough resources to create employment opportunities for the young adults, let alone progress. There are young people roaming around with ideas and visions, but the embodiment of those ideas are fat fetched. In some cases, the social structures of a particular country can even discourage young people from their visions. While some of them can manage to get what they want and contribute to their countries, it is not common at all. Developing and underdeveloped countries often fall to this vicious circle of poor economy, even if they have a large number of enthusiastic youth.
So, it cannot be generalized for all the countries. It turns out that economy plays an important role in determining whether advantages will prevail over disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "requires detailed" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'detailing' or 'to be detailed'.
Suggestion: detailing; to be detailed
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...thusiastic. They are full of new ideas. They are capable of using the resources of t...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...te employment for its' young people , their greater number contributes to the...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...rcle of poor economy, even if they have a large number of enthusiastic youth. So, it cannot be ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, while, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38853503185 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99311378981 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544585987261 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3928547101 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0526315789 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5263157895 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36842105263 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223564446049 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687434760296 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585708921807 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142637917761 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729189986046 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.