Some people believe that in order to give opportunities to new generations companies should encourage high-level employees who are older than 55 to retire. Do you agree/disagree? Why?
With the increasing competitiveness of the job market, opinions have diverged on whether or not enterprises should supplant staff aged 55 and above by younger people in the workplace. While there are some valid arguments against the idea of early retirement, I still believe that senior employees should give their vacancy vacancies for young generations.
Opponents of early retirement usually argue that elderly staff should continue to work as they still perform efficiently at the workplace. It is recognized that senior employees have more experience at the current positions, so replacing them would take a long time for the new one to get acquainted with the job. As a result, this could have a negative effect on the performance of a department as well as the whole company. Moreover, there is evidence to support the idea that although the government provides some supports, the enterprise still have has to pay a considerable amount of money for insurance policy and other supporting expenses for retires. This will by far upset the financial situation of the company if the number of aging employees retired increases.
Despite the preceding arguments, I support the view that senior staff should be encouraged to retire so that younger people can have an opportunity to perform. Firstly, the old generations usually hold the traditional way of lifestyle and thinking, which may affect the development of the organization. A case in point is that young adults would be more suitable for the techonology industry since it requires constant creativity and effort to generate new products. Another reason is that elderly people have devoted virtually all their life to work, so they deserve for retirement to rest and complete what they could not have done before. Therefore, senior citizens can spend their time pursuing their recreation or taking care of their offspring.
In conclusion, early retirement certainly has its drawbacks, but I believe that the benefits outweigh them in the long term for both the new generation and the senior staff.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...e job market, opinions have diverged on whether or not enterprises should supplant staff aged ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84140093923 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578313253012 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.293566022 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.076923077 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136030568664 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489444798294 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371290402822 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917825549563 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313829213339 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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