Some people think the purpose of education is to prepare the future workforce and make good members of society. Others think the purpose of education should lead to self-fulfillment. What is your opinion?

The aim of education has been discussed for centuries by a massive number of experts, officials, and common people, which makes the answers more tangled and complicated. Some people argue that the content of education should focus on the demand of society so that educated people can get accustomed to various social works quickly, while the other claim the role of education in the process of achieving personal ambitions.

For the one side, education is an indispensable step for all of us before we enter the society. Without receiving education, people could not grab necessary living and learning skills which optimizes their working efficiency and improving living standards. For instance, many practical courses in schools or universities are designed for the professional job, in which what students are prone to high relate to the requirements of job market, such as accounting, management, and IT. Only in this way can the society become more effective and better in that qualified youth people continues to get in every corner of the society through society-oriented education.

Conversely, personal ambition is the other purpose of education, which means the reason why individual seeks for a better education is no longer for the whole society but their own dreams. These evidences are increasing as the society is progressing. Unlike their ancestors who dedicated themselves for the country even if they obtained education in top universities and had opportunities to enjoy better lives, people in nowadays tend to stay aboard to have a higher living standards after receiving education.

From my standpoint, these two opinions are not contradictory because people is able to serve the society wherever they live in. Thanks to the convenient communication and service technology, locations and intentions do not attach importance to the social consequence any more.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...rtunities to enjoy better lives, people in nowadays tend to stay aboard to have a higher li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, if, so, while, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41016949153 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9734359686 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627118644068 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.0658688204 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.090909091 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8181818182 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163166770171 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567238487479 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058089004382 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997204008347 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652933882289 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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