With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects.
To what extent do you agree or disagree
Although,it is being observed that education play a very essential role in wholesome development of children in this educated world,it is not indeed to regret non-academic skill.Despite,With the burden on present young generation to succeed academically,certain section society opine that the non-academic subject should be vanished from the system. Consequently,it diverse their mind and they not can concentrate wholly on their academic study.I partially agree with this statement,and According to Oxford University, both are equally essential for wholesome development of an individual.
To embark on, there are multiple reasons why people assert that other activities like physical workout has equal importance as compare to academic study.first of all,most of time people doing their work on sitting a chair or bed and follow the new "sedentary lifestyle" as result of which their body fell very lethargic but,in order to make arglie people should give preference to physical activities such as yoga,playing sports etc.In addition,according to scientists research, their hormone in body which release when a person doing physical activity ie dopamine which is beneficial for health and helpful in diverting brain from one think to other therefore,physically fit person can achieve their goal faster then Therticaly knowledge once.
I would like to add some more point to support why people believe it not necessarily for everyone.there are quite few reasons behind this supposition that is some people only concentrate in non-academic skill which not so good for their study and further take Thertical knowledge as lightly but in actual they lost their life by these non related activities.for instance,they are numerous of people who try to get perfection in sports field so it very difficult task complete it however,if a person can not speak and write English language in this educated era then he will not do anything even if, he is best in their non-academic skill.therefore,education provide a basic knowledge for these activities.
To conclude,this essay has thrown light that both are equally important for being Seccuss in life and students try to do both academic or non-academic study because no one knows in which field a person is perfect.
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- With the pressures on today s young people to succeed academically some people believe that non academic subjects at school eg physical education and cookery should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects 75
- With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic sub 89
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68571428571 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.67197438967 2.80592935109 131% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611428571429 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 16.0721442886 12% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 175.0 20.2975951904 862% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 818.5 49.4020404114 1657% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 995.0 106.682146367 933% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 175.0 20.7667163134 843% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 54.0 7.06120827912 765% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273605150459 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.238903605987 0.084324248473 283% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334495529829 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16174308757 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600910217913 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 92.9 13.0946893788 709% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -123.07 50.2224549098 -245% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 73.9 11.3001002004 654% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.91 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 16.51 8.58950901804 192% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 33.0 9.78957915832 337% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 72.0 10.1190380762 712% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.