The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Technology has changed our lives completely and made it so much easier in ways, inconceivable few decades back. But, as every positive thing has a negative side, it has also made us weaker. The luxuries and conveniences we enjoy, is in turn preventing people from developing in to strong and independent individuals.
Our lives are technology driven. From commuting to work, to the nature of work and our life in general has become so much easier. Nobody from the horse driven carriage days would have imagined the luxury we have in our life. These luxuries have spoilt humans to some extent. When we need any information, we look up on the internet and we order food through applications and receive it at home. Such is the extent of luxury we enjoy in our daily lives. But, we also need to look at how such luxury and convenience is affecting us.
As more and more easier access is available to things, people get more and more lazier in mundane tasks. When any luxury is taken away people find themselves struggling for simple tasks. When a survey was conducted on whether a person can live without phone for a day, the results were astonishing. Majority of people did not know what to do without their phone. All their day's activities from getting up with alarm on phone to going back to bed was handled through phone. So the thought of loosing a phone is scary. Such people who are accustomed to luxury and convenience find themselves struggling to live a day without their luxuries.
Moreover, the luxury and convenience puts a person in a comfort zone. Only when people move of comfort zone and explore the world they become strong. As long as a person is within comfort zone, he will never take risks or opportunities that might help him to evolve in to a strong person. A person who faces difficulties and overcomes it becomes strong and confident. For a person to be independent, he needs to skip his luxuries and venture in to the world seeking opportunities and facing the challenges involved in it.
Although luxury and convenience makes or life simpler, it also makes us slaves to them. As long as we are not ready to shun our luxury we cannot grow in our lives. Thus, luxury and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from becoming strong and independent.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 13, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...ience is affecting us. As more and more easier access is available to things, people g...
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Line 9, column 76, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'lazier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: lazier
...vailable to things, people get more and more lazier in mundane tasks. When any luxury is ta...
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Line 9, column 269, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...person can live without phone for a day, the results were astonishing. Majority o...
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Line 17, column 89, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mpler, it also makes us slaves to them. As long as we are not ready to shun our lu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, so, thus, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7675 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65196978678 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5075 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3289208803 60.3974514979 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.28 118.986275619 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.04 5.21951772744 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30228606309 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918372604224 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137982911186 0.0758088955206 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18299630033 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958159960309 0.0667264976115 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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