The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island plans to limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. Last year, the neighboring island of Torseau enforced similar limits on moped rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. We predict that putting these limits into effect on Balmer Island will result in the same reduction in moped accidents."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The argument claims that reducing the number of mopeds rented out during the summer months, when population increases, would result in an annual decrease in moped related accidents by 50 percent in Balmer islands. while this argument seems sound, it makes four assumptions for which it lacks sufficient evidence.
To begin, the author states that the population of Balmer island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. However, he fails to mention if the increase in moped rentals is directly proportional to that of the population. perhaps the population that comes to Balmer during summer months prefers to walk. maybe they would rather travel by other means of transport like cars, buses, and trains. if the author provided proof of a substantial increase in moped rentals during the summer months, this argument would be valid.
The argument takes into account only rental mopeds while analyzing the accident rates. A majority of mopeds may be owned and not rentals. perhaps rented out mopeds are only a small percentage of the total number of mopeds on the island. if the author had mentioned that a majority of the mopeds in Balmer islands are rentals, this argument would have been accepted.
The author also assumes that the statistics of rental mopeds on Balmer island and that on Seaville island are the same. perhaps mopeds are the only means of transport in Seaville. maybe limiting the number of rental mopeds was not the only action taken by the town council of Seaville. if the author had provided evidence that reducing the number of rental mopeds was the only course of action taken by Seaville, the assumption would have been valid.
Finally, rental mopeds may not be the sole reason for the accidents. maybe the roads are not of great condition for mopeds. maybe the signals need maintenance. if the author had provided proof that the roads, signals and general traffic of the Balmer islands are in terrific condition, the argument would have been valid.
In conclusion, while the author may seem to have come to a sound conclusion regarding the reduction of accident rates on the Balmer islands, more evidence is required to thoroughly back the assumptions he has made.
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- The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette. "The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Bal 83
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1791 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.893 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.351 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 45.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.123 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.493 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.873 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.249 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The argument claims that reducing the nu...
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Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: While
...idents by 50 percent in Balmer islands. while this argument seems sound, it makes fou...
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Suggestion: Perhaps
...proportional to that of the population. perhaps the population that comes to Balmer dur...
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Suggestion: Maybe
...r during summer months prefers to walk. maybe they would rather travel by other means...
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Suggestion: If
...transport like cars, buses, and trains. if the author provided proof of a substant...
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Suggestion: Perhaps
...of mopeds may be owned and not rentals. perhaps rented out mopeds are only a small perc...
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Suggestion: If
...e total number of mopeds on the island. if the author had mentioned that a majorit...
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Suggestion: Perhaps
...d that on Seaville island are the same. perhaps mopeds are the only means of transport ...
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Suggestion: Maybe
...he only means of transport in Seaville. maybe limiting the number of rental mopeds wa...
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Suggestion: If
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Suggestion: Maybe
...t be the sole reason for the accidents. maybe the roads are not of great condition fo...
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Suggestion: Maybe
... are not of great condition for mopeds. maybe the signals need maintenance. if the au...
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...ds. maybe the signals need maintenance. if the author had provided proof that the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, may, regarding, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18306010929 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43828541173 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.431693989071 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2425123724 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.85 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300776647303 0.218282227539 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102740948965 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10114986204 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161225782882 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775738994003 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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