Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
The consequences of a scandal on a society can be multifarious. It can have both positive and negative effects on the community. So declaring solely that a scandal is useful or not is an equivocal comment and cannot encompass all aspect of such situation.
Scandals especially those happening in big scale in a society would possibly bring pandemonium to that society. In the ideal state it would be much rational for the laws and regulation to be so strict and watchful enough to preclude shaping such scandals. Consider a misuse of power by a president or fraud and falsification in results of an election. Such mishap could have such catastrophic consequence for the society that its negative results can remain in the subconscious of that society and hurt. This was what happened in 2009 Iranian presidential election. The scandal in tallying the votes brought chaos and bedlam to urban societies with so many rallies and protests. Some were incarcerated, others lost their life in aimless shootings in street, and now after more than a decade after all those happening there is still a deep scar in the subliminal layers of society, not re mediated yet.
On the other hand scandals are sensitive issues. It needs subtlety and great care to deal with. Usually media take advantage of something that might be a scandal but not even proven yet. Then you would see newspaper columns filled with rumors around the case and radio programs talking all the time about it. The scandal which aspects of it not elucidated yet and even sometimes the entire issue not proven, captures the headlines and infuses the society with a false kind of excitement. Just imagine if after a while the case shows to be otherwise, who is going to recompense for the injuries and suffering, the news has brought about, both for the society and for those alleged in the scandal. Don’t you think some of the cases in the challenge of "Me Too" has not been as serious and as true as they have been relayed with such enthusiasm and devoted excitement?
The word scandal brings with it excitement and inflammation. Such emotional arousal can be deleterious for the stability and peace of mind in society. Scandals may sometimes bring injuries for the individual and the community which might be much difficult to recover. So I believe it is better to change the word for "scandal" to simply a "case issue" which those who are responsible, can work on it without prejudice and bias, and without injecting a false and detrimental feeling of excitement into the mind and feelings of the society.
- Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. 66
- To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. 66
- Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archa 53
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. 16
- Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, then, thus, while, after all, even so, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2180.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96583143508 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82481996362 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533029612756 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6121125981 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.80952381 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0692468080397 0.243740707755 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254147275326 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0251339576052 0.0758088955206 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0493733472488 0.150359130593 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201301700304 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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