You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall.You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:•describ

Dear Sir,

I am John, from the band of brothers and i am writing to express my disappointment after receiving the letter from the community, that we will no longer be able to use the hall for rehearsals. I would request you to change the timings and days instead of cancelling the practice completely.

Let me explain our situation, we are a music group focusing on the betterment of community through spreading messages of peace and harmony through music. We do a lot of charity events thereby raising funds for the Springfield community. Our group has won awards from the local government for our contribution in the fight against drugs. As you know, Music has healing properties and it calms the senses. Music helps to rehabilitate people struggling with addiction to drugs.

However, if we are not supported by our community it will be difficult for us to continue the good work that we are doing for the service of humanity. I understand that there is some noise while playing music and it hinders with the evening mass at church opposite the building. Hence, I would request you to swap the timings and days instead of cancelling altogether. We are ok to practice on Monday's and Wednesday's instead of Tuesday and Friday evenings at the community hall.

Look forward to hearing a positive reply soon.

Yours faithfully,
John

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 42, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... am John, from the band of brothers and i am writing to express my disappointment...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, look, so, while, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1119.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 228.0 206.0 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90789473684 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76641064463 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605263157895 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 334.8 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8059066722 44.8134815571 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0769230769 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84615384615 4.34317383033 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213731340304 0.216113520407 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618765274959 0.0766984524023 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567860140881 0.0603063233224 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10811223578 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707758604199 0.0580467560999 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Dear Jain

I am Alice and a member of the music society Rock Five at YMC hall. I am writing this letter on behalf of my band members and would like to express my disappointment regarding a letter we received from the secretary council informing us that the community hall will no longer be available to use.

I would like to bring to your attention about our music band and its popularity. We are one of the internationally recognized music band and perform various group performances and live concerts in and around the country. As a group of young musicians, we primilary focus on music and lyrics that promote peace and inequality among mankind. We often participate in charity events and volunteer for social causes which helps the community . After a hectic day at work, most people gather at the community hall to spend time with friends and family to enjoy good music.

Upon receiving positive feedback from the social community, we would like to continue our practise sessions in the YMC hall. If possible, could you please provide us with alternative days and time for practise or we can shift our practise hours to the weekends.

Looking forward for a positive reply

Thanking You

Yours Sincerely

Alice