You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall You have been told however that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall Write a letter to the manager In the letter describe what

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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall.
You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.
Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:
* describe what the group does
* explain why the group is good for the community
* suggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear Sir,

I am Sayu from Gallileo band practising music along with my other musicians in the group on every Tuesdays and Fridays evening in your community hall located in Hammersmith, London. I am writing to you Today that we have been advised recently that the community hall will not be available on our usual rehearsal days.

We together, Gallileo band, organise many public events to raise a fund for our community development and also to donate some money for free education to the middle class students that we have recently introduced. I would like to bring to your note that, our community’s name and benefits that we offer to the poor people are established through our musician trope wherever we host our event. Therefore, our community is getting recognized not only locally but also throughout the nation. Consequently, we receive more donations from various people. We are fine to adjust our practising time instead of Tuesday and Friday evenings, we can push forward to Wednesday and Saturday Mornings.

I look forward to hearing your usual support.

Your sincerely,
Sayu

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 925.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 180.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13888888889 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70273638201 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672222222222 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.88451279 44.8134815571 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.777777778 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 4.34317383033 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163679675884 0.216113520407 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623589071347 0.0766984524023 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724618358145 0.0603063233224 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116012769813 0.12726935374 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119712908135 0.0580467560999 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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