You saw a brochure for a one week walking tour in the mountains You re very interested in taking part but you re not very fit and are worried you wouldn t be able to keep up Write to the tour operator In your letter Explain why you re interested in the to

Essay topics:

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:
• Explain why you're interested in the tour.
• Ask for information about dates and prices.
• Express your concerns about your fitness level.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am glad to see an advert for a week walking tour up the hills of mountains. I am excited to participate but unfortunately, I personally feel unfit for this trekking programme and also slightly worried I could compete with others in that tour group.

I am always interested to nominate me on outdoor events. I have many past experiences in doing outdoor events such as bush camping, rock climbing, marathon running. Nonetheless, my recent Golden Jubilee birthday celebration may warn me about my age and physical fitness but I am mentally young and strong. May I please ask for more information about the itinerary and the cost attach to it?

I am slightly concerned on a long walk as far as my age and breathing problem are concerned. I hope there will be some interval period, therefore, I am completely perfect for this event.

I look forward to getting the pricelist and event dates from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Sayu

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
This essay topic by users
Post date Users Rates Link to Content
2024-02-09 mehjabin 78 view
2023-07-24 SharmisthaNaskar 70 view
2023-02-16 msafaie 89 view
2021-04-21 Shwatank 87 view
2021-02-25 swodha 89 view
Essays by user sat_8808 :

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...pete with others in that tour group. I am always interested to nominate me on ...
^
Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ested to nominate me on outdoor events. I have many past experiences in doing out...
^
Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...inate me on outdoor events. I have many past experiences in doing outdoor events such as bush ca...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...m completely perfect for this event. I look forward to getting the pricelist a...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 801.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 165.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85454545455 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8327482786 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.715151515152 0.622605031667 115% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.444137714 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.1 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 4.34317383033 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126573296951 0.216113520407 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457953672682 0.0766984524023 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368529981382 0.0603063233224 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745851414763 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039716158795 0.0580467560999 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 8.37731958763 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.