Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?
In this society, rich people are being admired by others, but the question arises if possession of assets can determine someone’s achievement. In my opinion, as having a lot of wealth is not always linked with an individual’s personal attempt, this is not the perfect measure, rather the work that people recognize makes a person successful.
The top list of world’s richest persons is considered by many to be the top list of successful people. Entrepreneurs with break-through ideas are in that list, who fought hard to attain the achievement, but then again, a lot of the participants gained the money either from their parents or by selling natural resources. As a result, this is not material to measure the achievement by considering the value of a person’s net worth.
Regarding the best measure to decide a person’s success, it is the work, being praised by the others, that makes a man distinguised. In other words, great souls live in this society, who attempt to initiate positive changes by acting in a planned way. Once their actions start rewarding the community, the initiators are considered successful by the dwellers of that place. The achievement of Bill Gates and Warren Buffet , for instance, is not the financial position that they retain, rather its their decision to deligate their income for the betterment of the people who are lagging behind. The larger impact someone can make with his work, the more successful he becomes.
To conclude, a successful man can be wealthy, but a wealthy man is not alwasy successful. A person might have a lot of money, but if he has no intention to positively-transform a society, his journey towards success has not started yet.
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- It is believed that children from countries with a high level of unemployment should be offered only primary education and should not be offered with a secondary education as it is unlikely they will get a job in the future anyway. Do you agree or disagre 89
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- In companies, promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside the company, not to someone from outside or new hiring. Do you agree or disagree? 89
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 427, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 9, column 499, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ncial position that they retain, rather its their decision to deligate their income...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, so, then, well, for instance, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0985915493 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13328814725 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566901408451 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4978631977 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.666666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226934652807 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879214910583 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766148891179 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129918664492 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373040810254 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.