In order to stay healthy, many people choose to exercise. Some people tend to exercise individually such as running and riding bicycles, etc. Some people tend to participate in group exercises such as team sports. Which one do you prefer and why?
In the modern era, the robust body has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, people have always sought ways of enhancing healthy conditions. Some people may hold the view that an individuals sport such as driving a bicycle has the best effect on their health. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that group sports have the best effect on human health. I content that group sports bring several advantages points for people. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mention is that people who participated in a group sport had to do sports regularly. To elaborate on my point, when people choose a group sport like footballs, they can choose one position on their team like forwards. Hence, they have a critical position on their team, so they must participate in the practice of a team. If they do not participate in a team, their team would not practice very well. In this situation, people go to gyms and doing sports every day. And, they can not absent from the practice of their team, and after some month, this sport becomes an important part of their life. However, if people do some individual sports, they may not do their sports. Because they do not belong to a group, and when they feel do not like sports, they cannot do it. Indeed, they may not continue doing sports.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that participating in a group sport helps people to improve their social connection. To shed more light on this matter, since people doing a group sport, they must connect with other members of the team. In this situation, they find many new friends and improve social connection in their life. Also, a group sport learns people how to connect well with others, and how tolerates an opposite opinion. Consider a team of football, for instance. If someone wants to play as a forward, but their coach does not allow him, he must obey their coaches. Indeed, he knows that coaches have the ability to analysis situation conditions of a team, and they can better decide about a team until they will wine in their games. So, he learns how to respect others opinion.
All in all, considering all the aforementioned reasons leads us to the conclusion that a group sport has several positive points for people. I believe that doing a group sport not only makes a habit to people for doing regular sports but also helps people to improve social connections.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 372, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
... their life. Also, a group sport learns people how to connect well with others, and ho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, well, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82004555809 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4505508005 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473804100228 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6262225825 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.64 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.56 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232880169972 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08009852656 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675283599178 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148497686036 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357410896679 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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