The article implies that interview-centered method is more accurate than observation-centered method when understanding child-rearing traditions in island cultures. The argument is relied on the interviews done in Tertia island showing that children there spend more time talking about their biological parents than other adults in the village, so it concludes that the claim saying children reared by an entire village is invalid, and so is the observation-centered approach that supported the claim. However, before the argument can be properly evaluated, three evidence must be provided.
To begin with, the author attacked the claim that children were reared by the whole village from observation-centered approach is invalid because of their interviews with children on Tertia island are showing that children spend more time talking about their biological parents instead of other adults on the island. However, without evidence proving that words from children about their biological parents are actually demonstrating that biological parents were the people raising them, the interview cannot prove that the result from observation centered method is invalid. For instance, if the interview contained a lot of topics about children’s appearance, then it is very likely that children would carry out biological parents frequently during the conversation, because appearance of children was inherited from their biological parents. However, the fact that biological parents’ giving appearance genes to children has nothing to do with the question that whether children are reared by biological parents or not, so without this evidence, the interview cannot be a support to this argument.
Secondly, there are no details about these two kinds of methods, and without evidence that both interview-centered and observation-centered methods include enough people on islands as samples, the results from both approaches cannot be evaluated. For instance, if both methods only include less than twenty people on Tertia island; however, there are more then ten thousand people on Tertia island, then the result from either method cannot be valid because of no enough sampling data, weakening the representative ability of both results.
Further more, the article is assuming that every condition on each island is the same so drawing a conclusion that interview-centered method will establish a more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions in island cultures based on the result only from Tertia island. Whereas, it needs a solid evidence that every island is sharing the same conditions, including domestic, economic, and social conditions, and that it can further apply the result from Tertia island to other islands. Otherwise, the conclusion is periled because it based on the unwarranted assumption.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author can offer details of above evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the whether interview-centered is more accurate than observation-centered method on child-rearing traditions in island cultures.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 471 350
No. of Characters: 2639 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.659 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.603 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.24 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 223 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 165 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.643 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.943 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.668 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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The article implies that interview-cente...
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...ated, three evidence must be provided. To begin with, the author attacke...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...annot be a support to this argument. Secondly, there are no details about the...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... Tertia island; however, there are more then ten thousand people on Tertia island, t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...resentative ability of both results. Further more, the article is assuming th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ased on the unwarranted assumption. In conclusion, the argument, as it stand...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2712.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75796178344 5.12650576532 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34375829335 2.78398813304 120% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433121019108 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 840.6 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.4885601959 57.8364921388 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 193.714285714 119.503703932 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6428571429 23.324526521 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185102936378 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729702445792 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447502368524 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108212321072 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378311078344 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 14.3799401198 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.06 48.3550499002 44% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 12.197005988 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.72 12.5979740519 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 23.0 11.9071856287 193% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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