Some people say that international sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world.To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.Write at

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Some people say that international sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

In today’s world of crime and terrorism, events like international sports will help to bring harmony in the country and spread the message of peace and love among the citizens. There is an ideological verbalization that ‘sports not only build better athletes but also builds better people’, it generates a feeling of nationalism among the people without the feeling of hatred for other countries. There are many individuals who have a view that playing internationally will nurture friendship among the people worldwide. To what extent the countries will benefit from participation in worldwide competitions will be discussed further in this essay.

To embark on, sports played at an intercontinental level among the countries will help in building a healthy competition spirit, enthusiasm and a feeling of brotherhood among the people of different countries. Denizens of various nations come close to each other, have a friendly discussion and sharing of jokes among themselves. For example, India and Pakistan though have a lot of tension at their borders, but the friendly cricket match between them helps a lot as the players play in peace and harmony as well as it serves as a binding factor within them.

Moreover, multinational sporting events like commonwealth games and Olympic help to bring all the provinces together playing for their fame and popularity, moreover, feeling of patriotism arises among them when they win a gold medal for their country and the even plays their national anthem and hoist their flag. For example, people from places like west indies which are hardly known, when representing their birthplace on national events helps in the global recognition of their country. Furthermore, the internationally recognized sportsperson has a lot of fan following, who see them as their idols and follow their career paths thus helping the country to be globally acknowledged by having successful players participating in sport events. For example, Virat Kohli is the biggest fan of Sachin Tendulkar known as God of Cricket, is following his career path to be a world-renowned cricketer and brings popularity for his country.

To conclude, I am completely agreeing with the opinion that when Sports played at the International level it helps in easing tensions between countries and helps to outspread the message of tolerance, peace, and companionship.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun fan seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of fans'.
Suggestion: a lot of fans
...rnationally recognized sportsperson has a lot of fan following, who see them as their idols ...
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Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...arity for his country. To conclude, I am completely agreeing with the opinion that when Sports playe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39095744681 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06822232408 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550531914894 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.5742746241 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.916666667 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3333333333 20.7667163134 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127423075851 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544863115736 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0241904350676 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0834118487928 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251643969486 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 13.0946893788 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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