The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by marin123 on Sat, 11/09/2019 - 01:22

Salmon begin their lives in the river. They have 6 stages in their life cycle spend in river and the ocean.

Overall, salmon spend the early life at the river, while they spend rest of the time in ocean. However, they again come back to the river at the spawning time.

First, the young salmons emerge from eggs after the incubation. The baby salmons rear in fresh water, in the river. Before swimming to the ocean, young salmons migrate to the esturay. Since there they migrate to the rearing areas in the ocean.

During the time in the ocean, young salmons grow and mature to an adult fish. Consequently, adult fish travel to spawning areas in the ocean. Finally, they again migrate to the river for spawning. Then after they lay eggs and again the same cycle starts.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 185, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
..., young salmons migrate to the esturay. Since there they migrate to the rearing areas...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, if, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.0 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 647.0 965.302439024 67% => OK
No of words: 138.0 196.424390244 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6884057971 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.42743929552 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 1.95239769329 2.65546596893 74% => OK
Unique words: 69.0 106.607317073 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 194.4 283.868780488 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 22.4926829268 49% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 13.2316434689 43.030603864 31% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 53.9166666667 112.824112599 48% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.5 22.9334400587 50% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.23603664747 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136620902792 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606434699707 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439618543017 0.0843802449381 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913096317699 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343609817511 0.0819641961636 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 13.2329268293 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 61.2550243902 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.3012195122 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.74 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 11.4329268293 39% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.9970731707 58% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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