It is common nowadays for people over age 60 still working for a part-time or full-time job, in my opinion, this has both advantages and disadvantages for society.
The first obvious advantage is, some people after retirement still working because of many reasons, like financial problems, the economic situation or for a contribute with society, they are preferred to do something useful instead staying at home waste of time, also many employers like to hire this person because of they have more experienced and knowledge about running businesses; for example, people with high education, long-time management, and healthier condition, are the first choice for many companies, they can teach employees and find better solution for important situations .
On the other hand, there are many disadvantages to this debate like young people seeking a job and they have academic achievement and fresh ideas but they are unemployed because the oldest members of the community still on their position so there is no place for a younger mind. for instance, in my country, some people after their retirement still working on their job so practically there is no vacancy for anyone, this kind of society never grows up.
In addition, in developed countries working after retirement depend on their situations could be different, as people on white-collar jobs can work longer than people with blue-collar jobs; a good case in point is, doctors could still working for long periods of time after they are passed the age 60, but the mind workers could not work for years they maybe be forced to retire because of their health conditions.
To sum up, in my belief, the decision of working after retirement or not depends on the individual circumstances, it may be beneficial for society but it should never be at the cost of underachieving young educated people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...problems, the economic situation or for a contribute with society, they are preferred to do ...
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Suggestion: because they
...many employers like to hire this person because of they have more experienced and knowledge abo...
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Suggestion: .
...better solution for important situations . On the other hand, there are many d...
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Suggestion:
...er solution for important situations . On the other hand, there are many disadv...
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Suggestion: For
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..., this kind of society never grows up. In addition, in developed countries work...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'work'
Suggestion: work
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...re because of their health conditions. To sum up, in my belief, the decision of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, still, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12828947368 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76449248591 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555921052632 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 20.2975951904 246% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 151.984648348 49.4020404114 308% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 259.833333333 106.682146367 244% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.6666666667 20.7667163134 244% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.6666666667 7.06120827912 307% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192452070339 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108121811204 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456401292055 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115853141335 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039104645037 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.1 13.0946893788 215% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 20.73 50.2224549098 41% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.8 11.3001002004 202% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 9.78957915832 301% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.0 10.1190380762 217% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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