advertisement makes products seem better than they are
Companies need to sell their product, and advertisement is a paramount part of this procedure. I am of the conviction that advertising is an extremely advantageous in the totall profit of a company; therefore many companies make commercial-advertises a lot more appealing for public views. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will interpert in the following essay.
First of all, manufactures do not sell non-persuding products, well enough. For one thing, people buy what they percieve to be needed. For another thing, advertisements change people's opinion about a product; hence, if companies do not use strategies to make their items more appleaning, they would experience bank-erupcy, sooner or later. My personal experinece is acompelling example of this. About ten years ago, a freind of my father decide to make his company's advertisment more real; he believed in his product, a leather chair, to be good enough. In fact, their chair was the best, and listed as best selling-chair for more than five years, intermmitedlly. This change in advertisment system resulted to a sudden decrese in the company's profit.It did not take more than a couple of month for another competive company to take the glory of best-seller. Soon, my father's friend changed the advertisemnt into something else, an unreal chair with higher facillities compared to the real chair; consequenly, the selling-rate increasd immediatally. For this reason, they took back their first place since then, and the owner ows it all to the wonderful_unrealistic_ advertisemnts. I bilieve that many advertisements are made to persuade costumers; therefore they need to make products look better
Ostensibly, people care about the actual quality, but they only buy the most appealing items, and not surprisinglly, marketting teams know about this, so they persuade companies to make unrealistic advertisements.
Granted, we buy what we believe to be high-quality, but we do not always determine the quality of items. Marketing-teams persuade companies to use them to make better advertises and use influencers to persuade us about the non-existing high-quality of those companies' product. For instance, my sister wanted to buy a new cell phone around when she intered graduate school. She wanted to buy the model of Sony-Xperia because of its functions: good price, size, scree-resoloution, etc, however, this decision was due to change because of many advertises regarding the new Samsung smart phone. My sister was a huge fan of a kpop star, Lee Jung Hyun, and the second he mentioned about the samsung phone, my sister bouth the phone. Then she belived that the phone was high-quality, howevr, she have never purchasd another samsung phone after the star stopped advertising the phone. Consequently, marketing teams benfit from unreasltic marketing and many people actually buy the products.
In conclusion, I am of the opnion that companies choose the path to make their products looking better. This is because of their own profit and marketing companies' profit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, well, another thing, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, for another thing, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2566.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31262939959 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25678076822 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548654244306 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8723476344 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.636363636 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9545454545 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77272727273 5.45110844103 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253766744878 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721713481064 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839209632429 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147452041854 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543166907274 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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