Without a doubt, building a strong realationship is considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Relationship helps people to deal with both family and work obligations. I am sure that some people believe that the ability to make new friends easily is more important than having a friendship with small number of people for long time would be a great idea, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that it is more professional to keep tide bond of relationship whith little number of people for long time than building new frienship easily. I feel this way for two reasins, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, closed friends can help us to relieve stress of living in today's hectic societies. Recently, we are dealing with a lot of problem in this dynamic world and having good friends can help us to get rid from any frustration. For Instance, my father's experiemce is a compelling example of this. In fact, my father is a doctor at medical school and he has punch of colleagues. Last summer, he had to work like ten hours everyday for like five months. Furthermore, he has to take care of my little family. So, he felt frustrated and he was under stress. As a result, he was so depressed, and he started to contact his best friends who met at the campus. Also, he started to meet them for dinner and hanging out with them. Consequently, he would able to get rid from any stress and he felt better. Besides, he got a positive energy to complete his job effectively. On the other hand, if he could not have strong relationship with his friens, he would not be able to call them and ask for help during the hard situation. As you can see, having very close frienship is very critical to mange the life in a deap and meaningful fashion.
In addition, students who have a tide bond of relationship they can motivate each other. Nowadays, students are struggling with many assignments and exams, and they have to contact each other to finish a lot of paper work. For example, my daughter is a student at high school and she always overwhelmed with many projects. In fact, she has only one roommate in the same major. Furthermore, they can motivate each other to spend a lot of time at the library to finsh their project. Moreover, her roommate helped her to approach her studies in a professional manner. Consequently, they got a tremendous of information that helped them to gain new experience. So, both of them would be able to submit all the paper work on time and get plent of kowledge. As a result, they graduated with a high score. However, having a lot of friends might has a negative influence on students because they might get distracted. This experience taught me that people has to keep the strong relation with limited number of colleagues for long time to save their future.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people have to maintain the connection with small number of people for long time is very effective way to enjoy successful life. This is because closed friends help us to relive stress, and because students can motivate each other to catch their goals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of problems'.
Suggestion: a lot of problems
...ocieties. Recently, we are dealing with a lot of problem in this dynamic world and having good f...
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Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...t summer, he had to work like ten hours everyday for like five months. Furthermore, he h...
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Line 5, column 540, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a professional manner" with adverb for "professional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...mate helped her to approach her studies in a professional manner. Consequently, they got a tremendous of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2600.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64285714286 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62941562531 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471428571429 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2178252164 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8709677419 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.064516129 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45161290323 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25252660418 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608407051391 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780276183949 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184633955807 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105198312965 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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