It is commonly thought that women alone have the right to decide when to have babies, and this leads to the belief that women are responsible for bringing up children. I strongly agree with the opinion that said that fatherhood must be emphasized as much as motherhood.
People used to consider motherhood as the important or even the only one for deciding whether or not to have a baby. This thought may come from the role of a mother in the family, which is crucial, but this is not enough to consider women as the only concern about having children. As a result of that kind of thinking, people start to see mothers solely responsible for bringing up children, which is a great mestake, because children are a heavy barden that womencan not carry alone .
Fatherhood on the other hand is often seen less important than motherhood, and people usualy thinking that a chindren's responsability is for women alone. However, the role of the father is more than being reponsible for the house's needs, but also to bring up children and teach them all the way throughout life.
In conclusion, deciding whether or not to have baibies is a big decision, and niether women nor men can decide such a decision alone, parnts should carry the responsability of that decision together, and this will emphsasied fatherhood and breakn the idea of mothers alone responsible for bringing up children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...rtant or even the only one for deciding whether or not to have a baby. This thought may come f...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...avy barden that womencan not carry alone . Fatherhood on the other hand is ofte...
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ughout life. In conclusion, deciding whether or not to have baibies is a big decision, and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1155.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 238.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85294117647 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66528838759 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542016806723 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.1227910197 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.375 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.75 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.875 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423098056386 0.244688304435 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178595389019 0.084324248473 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739365039418 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266324666389 0.151304729494 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755507207943 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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