Some people say that devoting one’s time to family activities is more important than spending time working. Others believe that dedicating one’s time working.
It is a common belief that spending time for work has more beneficial than time for family. However, there is a more persuasive concern that spending time for member in family is necessary to develop completely emotion in human.
On the one hand, paying more attention to work is so important to the stability in family’s financial. Because the overall happiness in family depends much on the amount of money that members earn. That is why people should spend more time for work to improve careers. For instance, having a stable job, good salary, people easy to get more time for entertainment with family such as going travel or picnic at weekend. Member of family sometimes miss out some special events of each other, but it does not mean that they do not care about their family. It is a simple trade-off in developing your future and increasing family’s living standard.
Nevertheless, taking more time to family is more valuable than, because it contributes much on the happiness of people and whole family. Family time is always fun and relaxation, while we are easy to get stressed in working time. According to parents spend more time to their children, they may understand clearly their daughters or sons, and guiding them in right career or future. In some opposite cases, having lots of crimes are children who have upset story about their family, their parents do not listen to them or do not understand their feelings. It is not expectation in the modern world with have many kinds of bad attraction. Family time is a good method for everyone that sharing their stories, taking a break after stressing time.
To sum up, while time for working is more useful than family, it is undeniable that family time have many benefits for each other, so it should be the most priority.
- Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is waste of money. government must invest ths money in public service instead. to what extent do you agree with this statement? 61
- The table below gives information about the economic value of international students in US in 2005 2010 and 2015 The bar graph shows change in the number of international students from three countries in two of those years 87
- the three pir chart below show the percentage of US music album sales by genre in 2008 2009 and 2010 89
- the graph below shows the employment rate of each gender in four countries in 2002 71
- Some people say that devoting one s time to family activities is more important than spending time working Others believe that dedicating one s time working 87
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e stability in family's financial. Because the overall happiness in family depends...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, may, nevertheless, so, while, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85113268608 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53246533492 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521035598706 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1415406741 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9333333333 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349545759448 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13543844243 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778259759171 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237193530442 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318551695671 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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