"Because the future will be dominated by technology, we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students. If our students take these classes, they’ll all be able to get high-paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives because software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. Therefore, we must educate our students so they can secure these kinds of jobs. Even if they pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, given that all industries are becoming more technological."
In a speech given to the School board about the change in the curriculum, it is stated that there should be a mandatory computer programming course for all the high school students since the future will be dominated by technology. The author has come to this conclusion based on the fact that students in order to lead a successful life, should learn programming as it will help in getting high paying jobs. However, before jumping into this conclusion, the author should provide some evidence to back up the conclusion.
First of all, there is no statistical data to prove that software engineers and data scientists are earning more than other people. In the IT industry, the competition for jobs will be very high and lucrative jobs require work experience like internships to be completed before getting a job as a full-time employee. There is no guarantee that if a student has completed a course on programming is going to get a job. Due to competition in the market, there will be instances where engineers who are ready to work for less pay also. If one of these above scenarios has merit, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is flawed.
Secondly, not all students are good with math and logic, some are interested in studying literature, history, biology, and economics. There are high paying jobs available such as chartered accountant, jobs in medical fields, etc. in these sectors as well. If the above is true then the conclusion does not hold water.
Thirdly, the author claims that programming will be helpful for students as it used in all fields because all industries are becoming more technological. There is simply not enough evidence to back this statement, For instance, if we take up paper literature, programming has zero effect on this. So to conclude that programming will help is not proper.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide some more evidence, then it will be possible to evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to add computer programming course for high school students.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1752 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.84 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.756 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.557 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.573 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.047 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
What will include computer…
What will include computer programming in the school curriculum? As a developer at https://lomray.com/ , I can definitely say that you want to take too much knowledge. I would focus on a specific direction that is interesting for children
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...to lead a successful life, should learn programming as it will help in getting high paying ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
... are earning more than other people. In the IT industry, the competition for jobs will...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 528, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...eers who are ready to work for less pay also. If one of these above scenarios has me...
^^^^
Line 9, column 257, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... fields, etc. in these sectors as well. If the above is true then the conclusion d...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 362.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0138121547 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86240769227 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505524861878 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0397090814 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.764705882 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433216922479 0.218282227539 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119782503333 0.0743258471296 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106263678515 0.0701772020484 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224653077629 0.128457276422 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655606853492 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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