How have you contributed to HeForShe movement about gender equality?
In our world, the numbers of people suffering from sex inequality and sexism had been increasing over past few years while more individuals had been trying to demonstrate these problems. Sexual related problems exist worldwide and need a rapid solution. It also is commonly seen in Thailand and especially in Thai school where should be the safest place for children. We all the people have to be a first little step to make change to the world. I would like to make this little step by telling a story of mine and how I have been feeling since that far.
I completed my primary education at a school in Bangkok where people believed gender was not a big deal for students because they were too young to understand. On the contrary, it was the beginning of sexism and bullying among the children. Boys can play with girls, but a boy cannot play with group of girls, he would be called “ตุ๊ด” or “Tud” which meant gay. This happens to 5th grader. Moreover, this kind of bullying did not exist only in student-student relation, but also from teachers to students as well. I had seen some male educational staffs acted inappropriate with girls in school. I also experienced time when teacher called student with that T word in class and made fun of their appearance. The sexual harassment continues to happen even time flies.
Apart from that, more teenagers in high school and even grown-up have sexualized more frequently and commonly. Our society has changed in such unbelievable way. In Idaho, United States where I spent my year as an exchange student, transgender and any other kind of bisexual is unacceptable due to religious reason. I knew some of my friend were LGBT, but they had no right to express the way they were which was so sad. Back to Thailand, I have a group of friends and some of them are bisexual, I don’t think they are weird, should be seen in other way rather than the way we see all straight as human being. Not only LGBT population that suffers from this problem. There have been a ton of news published about female children get sexualized and sometimes were acted like male fantasy stuffs. For example, Billie Eilish, girl artist who just barely turned 18, was the top search in Pornhub after her birthday. This is sad and we all people have to feel regret. No one should be sexualized, not even in mind.
However, I still have experienced some tough situations when I accidentally make fun of them or people make fun of me. I had participated an online survey run by Harvard University which result was unacceptable and I regretted when I saw it said I had preference straight over LGBT. It was real, but that was time I say to myself to change. After the result of survey was out, and I felt regret, I decided to overcome the challenge an come up with serious talk to my friends about LGBTQ+. I did an online research about each gender that people expressed in their own way which made my notion of sex better. I did speak out as a representative of the topic about Inequality in Society which sexism was involved. All these things realized me once about people’s understanding. No one can make a big change, but everyone can start making change. That is why we have to start on our own and show them who and what we are. And after the knowing of HeForShe, I stood out and share my commitment to join this global movement for gender equality. Because this is the 21st century, we all have human right, gender equality and freedom should be reserved for all human being.
To sum up, I had been experiencing several sexual harassments. This world nowadays has been full of gender inequality. At the same time, there are people who stand out and raise for their and their friends’ right as human because this is not just women or gays’ issue, it’s a human rights issue. This world needs change from its popularity, it comes to the time where we all need an attitude toward gender. All mankind is equal, people everywhere need to understand and support the idea of gender equality.
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| 2019-12-21 | NeutronnzZ | 56 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 433, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...et, I decided to overcome the challenge an come up with serious talk to my friends...
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Line 13, column 496, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'online research'.
Suggestion: online research
... talk to my friends about LGBTQ+. I did an online research about each gender that people expressed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, moreover, so, still, well, while, apart from, for example, kind of, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 13.1623246493 289% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 10.4138276553 288% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 7.30460921844 301% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 80.0 24.0651302605 332% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 95.0 41.998997996 226% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3367.0 1615.20841683 208% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 717.0 315.596192385 227% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6959553696 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.17463580148 4.20363070211 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69595573036 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 350.0 176.041082164 199% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488145048815 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1031.4 506.74238477 204% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 28.0 5.43587174349 515% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 0.809619238477 988% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 16.0721442886 243% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.403124691 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3333333333 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3846153846 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10256410256 7.06120827912 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 3.4128256513 322% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12248119673 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0300236848882 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372729938741 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0685744959424 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041517284354 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 78.4519038076 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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