the opinion of celebrities are more important to younger people than older
Without a shadow of doubt, the celebrities influence their society to a high degree. I believe that their effect are more profound on young people than older people. In what follows, I will aptly, elaborate on my perspective.
The first remarkable point to be mentioned is that the character of the people are not so firm at very early age. So, the famous entertainers and athletes can affect them strongly and the children imitate their behavior. Also, the children learn many things from them. Even they wish that they would be those renowned people to have such luxurious lives. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was ten years old, because I have not a fixed characteristics, I loved Selena Gomez so much that I wanted to travel to America to join her team while I did not have any skill for music. Also, I have made my hair and gesture like her. In addition, I bought the necklaces and dresses similar to her to be the same as her. However, I gradually forgot her and I tried to be like myself not anybody else.
Another equally important reason is that children expend their time more than adults on watching TV and videos. In other words, because every body can be inspired by the people surrounding him and the acters and athletes are thase who children see most of their times, they are influenced by those people. For example, my father works in a police office where has a district environment and he should be so disciplined that others obey his orders. So, he is in the same way at home and talk with me as he is my police not my father!
In conclution, the celebrities have a strong effect on juvenile because not only their behavior have not become firm and invulnerable, but also they spend most of theri free time on watching television. It is highly recommended that make the children busy with other activities such asd painting and outdoor plays like football to prevent them from watching those videos most of the time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 460, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'characteristic'?
Suggestion: characteristic
...n years old, because I have not a fixed characteristics, I loved Selena Gomez so much that I wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, while, for example, in addition, such as, in other words, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63817663818 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53583980543 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564102564103 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5836813995 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7647058824 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116781019762 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405830329678 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753141039247 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087871843616 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759966621669 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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