Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Success in many endeavors relies on a variety of skills and circumstances. The ability to work with others, rather than against them is of primary importance. Such an approach creates a positive and healthy environment that increases the spread of ideas for solutions and cooperation. However, sometimes there is a benefit to tapping into the basic human survival instinct of competition to engage some of a leader’s best allies, which can be transformative to a sought-after outcome.
The story of Bill Gates illuminates the advantages of cooperation over competition. Bill grew up in a silo. He was an introvert who spent most of his time alone in his childhood bedroom, reading books of all kinds. Such voracious self-educating is a habit he has continued through his professional career. As with leaders in many arenas, he acquired vast amounts of knowledge which might give him an edge over others, and indeed he admits to being a highly competitive person. Yet, as a young kid, Bill was irascible. His parents, leaders in civic and philanthropic circles, knew this would not help him in life. At the age of 12, when his relationship with them reached a low, they made him enter counseling. The therapist explained to young Bill that his family wanted the best for him and were not trying to work against him but with him for his success. By the time he was 25, his family had become his key personal support as he launched Microsoft.
Knowledge and ability cannot replace relationships. And relationships are generally stronger when individuals are positively engaged and included, not pushed away in opposition. As the saying goes, “Catch more flies with honey than with vinegar.” Cooperation unites and competition divides, and in many pursuits, the more minds involved, the better. Gate’s later career also demonstrated this principle in operation, as he transitioned from running Microsoft to the Gates Foundation. It was intended for his wife to help him co-manage the organization. However, after decades of being sole CEO of his business enterprise, Bill admitted that sharing the power with his wife was not an easy transition. Colleagues say that Bill is one of the only leaders who never has an ill word about his wife, and their collaborative partnership is famous in the business community. The Foundation is now the largest non-profit organization in the world.
In turn, there are times when it is most effective to stir competitive spirit to accomplish what is necessary. The seat of the US presidency has often been filled with individuals of such a nature. Indeed, as politicians are uniting their campaign teams in a cause, it is for the purpose of outstripping their opponents in the election. Bill Gates also used his awareness of human nature for the success of his foundation. When he first espoused the cause of clean water, he approached eight universities for innovative proposals on sewage treatment systems. None responded. However, when he then told each university that it would be a public competition between the others, all joined the project enthusiastically. Now the Gates Foundation has developed and supports a new water filtration system that treats one-third of all waste-water in Dakar.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 260, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lies with honey than with vinegar.' Cooperation unites and competition divid...
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Line 9, column 753, Rule ID: ONE_OF_THE_ONLY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one of the few'?
Suggestion: one of the few
...ransition. Colleagues say that Bill is one of the only leaders who never has an ill word about...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, third, thus, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2743.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 530.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17547169811 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07577785257 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549056603774 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9728313046 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5862068966 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.275862069 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.06896551724 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102105169521 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0250335307489 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037936825867 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.073249071145 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281669604817 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 100.480337079 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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