Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The presence of factories near residential zones is a very controversial topic in modern society. Some people may think that it would lead to critical issues related to environment and society. Personally, I would firmly support the construction of a factory near my hometown. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, my community desperately needs the job that the factories would provide. I live in an economically disadvantaged region which has suffered from high rates of unemployment and poverty for more than thirty years and the locals were eager to get the issue addressed. Moreover, this has had some very severe effects on the region, including high rates of poverty and homelessness as well as crime, let alone the outdated infrastructure. This reminds me of my brother’s situation. He lives in the same county as I do, but in the different city. Several years ago, a cellphone manufacturer has erected a plant in the suburb of the city, some people hold the opinion that the construction of the factory are at the expanse of the environment and individual’s health. The majority of the locals, however, think that it is an acceptable trade-off for the declines in crime and poverty in that they get a good job which pay them a decent salary and live a reliable life, which outweigh the side effects of the construction of the industry.

Secondly, modern technologies are not bad as some people assume. For example, here in Canada, the industries come equipped with advanced technologies that removes the most dangerous chemicals before the regular emissions. Plus, the local municipal government has released a wide variety of regulation about the rules of discharge of toxic gas. All of which can reduce the pollution in terms of air and water, as well as alleviate the concern locals have when they think about the construction of factories. Moreover, the government will allocate a great deal of capitals to mitigate the issues brought about by the factory, to be specific, the traffic officials can take the advantage of the funds to improve the public transportation to reduce the release of the polluted gas. Not only this action can offer more convenience to locals, but also alleviate the traffic congestion occurred during the rush hours.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that a factory would be a wonderful addition to my community, This is because it would create a lot of employment, and because the industry plants are not as dirty as people think. Compared with the side effects, people will benefit more from the construction of the factories.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nstruction of the industry. Secondly, modern technologies are not bad as some ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02733485194 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94597941852 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521640091116 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5404874984 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.157894737 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1052631579 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0518338797546 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.017541548983 0.076458572812 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0210910663599 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.03085999323 0.150856017488 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104776943886 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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