You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall.You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:•describ

Hello Sir or Madam,

I am Danny Garcia, member of Trinity music band, writing to express my grave concern about the letter we have received from the community hall authority last Friday.

The letter simply stated that we can no longer practice in the community hall and better look for an alternative. However, as a young group of musicians we concentrate more on lyrics which promotes peace and equity in the society. Primarily, the main moto of this band is not to make money out of it, but for a great cause. Many of the young stars follow us through the social media. We often attend voluntary programs and do social works as a team.

As we are banned by the community hall, we will find it harder to get another hall for practice and it might be more expensive to bear. On behalf of the team i would like you to reconsider the decision taken by the community. We are happy even if the practice can be permitted in the alternate days such as, Monday and Thursday.

I look forward to hearing from you soon, and please do the needful.

Yours faithfully,
Danny

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 159, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...xpensive to bear. On behalf of the team i would like you to reconsider the decisi...
^
Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...We are happy even if the practice can be permitted in the alternate days such as,...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 194.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60309278351 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3855066419 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659793814433 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 279.0 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.714099723 44.8134815571 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1818181818 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 4.34317383033 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245241692507 0.216113520407 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734151279068 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719406825564 0.0603063233224 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128874619578 0.12726935374 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042137229944 0.0580467560999 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 8.37731958763 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.