The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVDor video.

Essay topics:

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD

or video.

The bar chart shows how worldwide sales of games software, CDs and DVDs/videos

changed in the period from 2000 to 2003.

Overall, the sales of games software and DVDs/videos increased steadily each year.

However, CDs enjoyed the highest sales throughout this period.

In 2000, CD sales were much higher than those of the other two products. They totalled 35

billion dollars, compared with 18 billion and 15 billion dollars for DVDs/videos and games

sofware, respectively. Global sales of games software grew steadily, reaching a figure of 18 billion dollars in 2002, while the figure for DVDs/videos went up to about 27 billion dollars

in the same year.

In contrast, worldwide sales of CDs witnessed a gradual decline during the years shown,

falling to 32 billion dollars in 2003. This was still slightly higher than sales of DVDs/videos,

which reached a peak of 30 billion dollars in 2003. In that year, games software sales also

rose again, finishing at 19 billion dollars.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Changed
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...ion dollars for DVDs/videos and games sofware, respectively. Global sales of games so...
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...s went up to about 27 billion dollars in the same year. In contrast, worldwide...
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...tly higher than sales of DVDs/videos, which reached a peak of 30 billion dollars in...
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... that year, games software sales also rose again, finishing at 19 billion dollars....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so, still, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 846.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25465838509 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56057360188 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583850931677 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 219.6 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6613010848 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 3.83414634146 287% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243713886252 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114441067724 0.103423049105 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712640085409 0.0843802449381 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102929178238 0.15604864568 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954897626213 0.0819641961636 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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